One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Advancements in the fields of science and medicine have enabled human mankind to stay alive longer. The technology has attributed to this phenomenon of elongated epoch of life after retirement. This essay will try to understand the pros and cons of such an increase in life expectancy.

The first major advantage of the above scenario is that people who have been diagnosed with a malady can be treated more effectively. Thus, in this case the patient will not have to suffer pain because the medicines and the treatment is more effective. Moreover, this means a greater chance of survival and the family of the patient gets to save their loved one and cherish the feeling of togetherness for a longer time.

In continuity, such improvements means opening of new avenues for research and further study. This attributes to people taking a course in the related field. This further creates the need of skilled people who can provide their help in conducting researches and further achieving results that can be put to create life saving drugs for the mankind.

A disadvantage to the above is the increase in the aging population that are not fit to do a job or have attained the retiring age. For example, in Japan a major chunk of population is old and living in old age homes. In this case, there is shortage of young brains and fresh legs when it comes to job opportunities. Further, there are not enough volunteers to help the older generation and to look after their well being.

To recapitulate, the merits clearly outweigh the demerits of having a refined medical care for a prolonged survival of human mankind. The utmost and best care should be giving to patients affected by a disease so that they can enjoy the beautiful journey called life.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, so, thus, well, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85099337748 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66011124461 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566225165563 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.9955552469 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1333333333 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196244283658 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580219392529 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0275469461277 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975132157287 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0164178143327 0.056905535591 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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