The number of juvenile offenders has been increasing at an alarming rate. The authorities concerned, criminology experts, and the public have different opinions on this matter. Some believe that the only way to reduce this rate is to teach mothers and fathers how to parent their children better, while others might have other viewpoints. From my perspective, I advocate for the belief that having parents learn better skills in educating their children is not the only way to solve this problem.
The quality of parenting is not the only factor that makes youngsters commit a crime. Other factors might also force students to offend. For example, as studying in the school, a person might fail to free himself or herself from the temptations from the peers. A young boy is asked to take drugs just because his "friends" want him to be cool enough to join the group. Or, perhaps, a girl is ordered by others to verbally and physically abuse other girls to prove that she is qualified to become part of the ally and to form a group to take control of others' life.
Those who hold the other opinion might claim that family is the first place where a child learns how to behave like an obedient individual. That is to say, parents should learn how to parent their offspring better. At first glance, their argument seems to be valid; however, they have ignored some important factors. Indeed, it is the parents' responsibility to teach their children, but this is not the only way to prevent children from committing crimes. The school teachers should also monitor the situation while the students are at school. Besides, educational institutes should also educate students not to disobey the laws. Only in this way can we reduce the rate of juvenile criminals.
Certainly, some people might have other opinions against me on this matter; however, I believe that there are other ways to achieve this wanted aims.
- TPO 48 Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Because modern life is very complex it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize
- University students should pay all the costs of their studies because university education benefits only individuals but not the society as a whole To what extent do you agree or disagree
- The only way to solve increasing crime rate of young offenders is to teach parents better parenting skills To what extent do you agree 78
- More and more people work at home and study at home with the development of computer technology Do you think it is a positive or negative development 61
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...or the belief that having parents learn better skills in educating their children is n...
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Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
...me important factors. Indeed, it is the parents responsibility to teach their children,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, so, while, for example, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1601.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91104294479 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56799769119 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564417177914 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9916147493 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1764705882 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1764705882 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58823529412 7.06120827912 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22460809318 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0789904013016 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0868850148911 0.0667982634062 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131858962723 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0922896511535 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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