People nowadays are surrounded by all kinds of advertising. Advertising affects what people think is important and it has a negative influence on people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As we are living in a more digitalised era, we found ourselves constantly influenced by commercials of all kinds. There's no denying that the information they contain can both consciously and subconsciously affect our decision making, I do not believe that all of the impact is negative.
We can't overlook the amount of social impact advertising have on our society, especially for the younger generations. Since minors are still in the process of forming their world view and have little real life experience, the information passed down by the mass media can have a profound influence on them. In the 80s, for example
, cigarette commercials were ubiquitous and smoking were considered cool. As a result, teenagers of that time were more likely to develop the habit of smoking. This
took a toll on the entire national health and became a major public concern. Clearly, this example illustrates that commercial can easily shape our belief system, especially in the early ages.
That being said, however, I don't share the view that all advertisements yield ill results. The best example would be charity commercials for non-profits. For instance
, the World Wild Animal recently launched a grass-root campaign in major US cities. The campaign advocated for animal natural habitant's preservation. Not only did the organization distribute one-minute short YouTube videos about the daily life of the animals for awareness building, they also posted posters for fund raising. In the end, it gathered enough money to preserve and support 7 different habitats for 3 years. This magnificent case shows us the positive impact of advertisement could bring.
In conclusion, it is true that commercials will shape the way we see the world. While some of them might bring negativity to the society, others bring out of the best of people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, still, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21283783784 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87834384576 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635135135135 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5466947843 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7647058824 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0733383362709 0.244688304435 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0224554685531 0.084324248473 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0308573910485 0.0667982634062 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0335323098591 0.151304729494 22% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0325934216671 0.056905535591 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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