'At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people.
Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?'
There are some countries where young people significantly outnumber those who are elderly. This is a situation which can present both benefits and challenges for the countries concern.
On the one hand, adding young adults can be beneficial for a nation. Governments could exploit them in different professions for long duration and achieve much tax revenue which will keep the steadiness of economy. For instance, Canadian and Australian governments have implemented their migration policies for receiving young immigrants to maintain economical development. In addition, this situation can offer lower manufacturing expenses for the multitude entrepreneurs. A dense of young citizens could raise a competitive job market in the country which instigates the investments of private sectors. A recent survey shows that 30% of worldwide corporations has avidity to invest in such countries which have low employee cost. This can enhance the export businesses in a country.
However, I argue that the drawbacks of this situation outweigh the benefits. Including majority of young individuals can lead a nation to unemployment issues. Governments have to improvise a new early retirement policy for senior individuals to accommodate young personnel in various occupations. As a result, the state needs to manage hefty amount of funds for their pensions which would place a burden on the economy. Another downside is that most young people require training to gain expertise level, so governments have to spend remarkable amounts of money to produce skilled population. Otherwise they will remain jobless. A recent report shows the capital city Kathmando in Nepal has the highest unemployment rates among in Asia due to scarcity of skill people and low promotion of agri-based industries which is the mainstay of the economy. Furthermore, there is a cultural threat on local traditions when many young migrants are add-in, because they might compromise with country laws but not with own customs.
In Conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of comprising young people are more significant than the possible benefits
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 350, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... receiving young immigrants to maintain economical development. In addition, this situatio...
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Line 3, column 480, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'gaining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: gaining
...that most young people require training to gain expertise level, so governments have to...
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Line 3, column 593, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...of money to produce skilled population. Otherwise they will remain jobless. A recent repo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49390243902 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98149532889 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615853658537 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.661665041 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.111111111 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88888888889 7.06120827912 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128000593481 0.244688304435 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0450372552825 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403344906864 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.08726110772 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488339298749 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 78.4519038076 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.