Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personalily and development than any experience we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?
In this modern era, there is an ongoing deliberation among people on what can make major influences on an individual. While some people argue that, in born talents make more influence on people than their experiences, on my point of view I disagree with this argument. In this essay, I shall discuss on how experiences help individuals in achieving their life goals together with their in born talents.
First and foremost, there are myriad of advantages individual can achieve through life experiences such as improved efficiency and effectiveness at work together with the quality of life. For instance, experiences helps people to derive in solutions with less time and effort, since they have experienced consequences of all the options through the past. Apart from that, individuals can deal with people while mitigating the conflicts since they have undergone similar situations in the past. In addition, failures can be taken as the pillars of the success, therefore individuals can take successful decissions based on the learnings and lessons from the past events.
On the other hand, in born talents would also make major influences on individual success since every person need a talent to perform a specific task in a competitive manner. For example, for sporting events an individual need specific set of talents to achieve success in sports field together with continous practice. In fact, if a person does not have any passion or talent in aesthetic subjects will not be able to perform well eventhough with regular practice.
In conclusion, experience plays a pivotal role in human development and it is advised to give more opportunities to children to get experience in different aspects. It is also believed, that the national curriculum should be upgraded to facilitate children in getting experiences together with sufficient resources. Finally, the other factors which would affect on human development should be investigated to empower future genration with necessary skills and knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37106918239 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90482304361 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569182389937 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 534.6 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 18.5037977871 49.4020404114 37% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 131.384615385 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4615384615 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203873504799 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739266116805 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282735657379 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117165958683 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170302611034 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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