Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is common that developed nations donate money to developing countries in purpose of eliminating poverty. Due to the fact that poverty still exists, many people believe that instead of financial aid, richer countries should support those poorer countries in other ways. Personally, I completely agree with this view.
To begin with, the main cause of poverty is not the lack of money but how people in that country spend the money they have. To illustrate this, many people in third world countries who earn barely enough, tend to use their financial aid to handle immediate problems such as paying debt, or just purchasing daily food. In this way, after using up the cash support, those people do not know how to improve their earnings and be back to poverty. Thus, donating money to less developed countries can only help poor people in the short term, rather than solving national poverty.
Furthermore, there are more appropriate methods of alleviating poverty. First, developed nations can help other nations training well-qualified workforce. For example, advanced countries can accept more foreign students from third world nations each year and offer them chances to get full ride scholarships. Those students would become employers equipped with social skills and knowledge in new technology achievements, so they can be able to make enough money to support their family and also save up for future plans. Second, developed countries should open more branches of international companies in less developed countries. In this way, there will be more well-paid jobs, and thus less unemployment. Therefore, the rate of poverty would decrease in those nations.
To conclude, instead of developing countries financially, developed nations should consider other methods such as helping them building workforce, establish international company branches as long-term solutions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, still, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44863013699 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72072822521 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.599315068493 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5915583103 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.066666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.93333333333 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281595858516 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0990602451741 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838166937097 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196699536998 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690622403797 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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