Shopping is now one of the most popular forms of leisure activity in many countries for young adults.Why is this?Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Undoubtedly,the youth is appealed towards shopping in many nations these days as their favourite choice of leisure activity. There are numerous reasons for it which are elaborated below followed with my opinions in perspective of development.

First and foremost, the primary reason for the youngsters to be shopaholics is the affordability.In the past, people could afford luxury trips to foreign countries in their free time unlike now.Today, adolescents are lured towards the latest fashion trends which are cheaper for them.For example, a poll conducted in US presented that 45% of teenagers are attracted towards electronic things like gadgets,mobile phones,etc. and spend their money on acquiring these products. Secondly, the over influence by celebrities is also a major factor for youth to allure towards shopping in free time.they keep on exploring the consistently changing lifestyle of the celebrities and try to incur in their lives.For instance, a creative and thriller advertisement of ponds body lotion by a famous actress Kareena Kapoor entices alot of young people to buy this product.as a consequences, the young ones opt to go for shopping in free time because of affordability and aesthetic value of materials.

Further,there is a negative impact of youth being shopaholics on their career goals.Also,host of parents have noticed that the academic records of their children plunge after entering the universities.In other words, instead of focusing on studies, students do part time jobs to elevate their pocket money for buying products in their leisure time.However, the individuals patronize retailers and spend money on buying their products which motivates investors to go ahead with new businesses.Apart from it,the money spent on shopping boosts the economy of a country.As a result, there is a growth in employment opportunities for humans.So, there is negative and positive development both because of youth shopping in their free time.

in conclusion,although the products entice youth to shop in their leisure time because of affordability and aesthetic value, I think that it also stmulates the economy of a nation and increases employment opportunities.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, apart from, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, as a result, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1863.0 1615.20841683 115% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57784431138 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28438201045 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568862275449 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 20.2975951904 232% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 233.060034308 49.4020404114 472% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 266.142857143 106.682146367 249% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 47.7142857143 20.7667163134 230% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.7142857143 7.06120827912 279% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171102935795 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714632148517 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421191587085 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986774832117 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0250971746422 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.7 13.0946893788 219% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 15.31 50.2224549098 30% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 11.3001002004 202% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.97 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.93 8.58950901804 127% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.8 10.1190380762 206% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 10.7795591182 269% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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