Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing while others disagree Give your opinion and explain both views

Essay topics:

Some countries encourage teenagers to have part time job and see it as a good thing, while others disagree? Give your opinion and explain both views.

Recently many countries believe that work part-time is beneficial for younger generation for their better future, however, others against to this argument as teenagers should focus on their studies. The following paragraph will discuss both views and reach a concrete decision.

On the one side, the importance of part-time job helps individual to gain knowledge in their respective field. Additionally, it broadens many ways to explore their talent in a small age. Part-time jobs also affect positively as individual get pocket money from parents, work part-time can earn their own and save for their future. For example, extra earning can help individuals to pay their tuition fees if they belong to a poor family. Working as an employee, attain skills to work in a team and accomplish the targets on time which help in studies to make projects in a team.

On the other side, some people think that teenagers ought to focus on their study instead of earning money, they are too young to work part-time after appearing in graduation then they have better opportunity to work full time. Additionally, working in young age can also have negative effects, focusing on studies can be denied easily. Obtained fewer marks in studies can close the door of many job opportunities. For instance, doctors, scientist, I.A.S officers, lawyers need to focus on their studies in place of work part-time.

In conclusion, I believe that teenagers must focus on their studies hard to earn a better job placement in future. The juvenile from all different fields needs knowledge and the best way to gain it, only from studies.

Votes
Average: 7.6 (11 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: fulltime
...en they have better opportunity to work full time. Additionally, working in young age can...
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Line 5, column 454, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
.... For instance, doctors, scientist, I.A.S officers, lawyers need to focus on thei...
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Line 7, column 105, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ies hard to earn a better job placement in future. The juvenile from all different fields...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1353.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08646616541 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64755889324 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582706766917 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7009742217 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.076923077 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4615384615 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151216765361 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580687116507 0.084324248473 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490112988325 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980144365039 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034189453524 0.056905535591 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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