Some governments spend a lot of public money training up individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays sportsmen and sportswomen have an important role in our modern societies, hence, governments allocate the majority of tax payer’s money to support the aforementioned athletes to achieve more success in sporting events around the world. Although some people tend to side with this trend, others, myself included, believe the contrariwise. Therefore, the conflicting views regarding the merits and demerits of this movement lead to rising of the question as to whether this capital should be used for other beneficial practices instead. This essay seeks to comprehensively explain my viewpoint on this matter.
The supporters strenuously defend the aid of government given to the sporting community simply because they consider this group to be role models of our society. They argue that by allocating money to promoting sports, the youngsters will be encouraged to have a healthier lifestyle and steer away from shady activities and people with a broken moral compass. Furthermore, they say helping sportsmen to achieve success will also bring glory to the nation.
On the other hand, while the mentioned attitude is perfectly understandable, an inherent weakness in such a viewpoint is that it disregards the advantages of pursuing other ventures. I tend to side with those who think that we should prioritize our needs and use our national wealth wisely so that the posterity will benefit from our decisions. I strongly believe that taxpayers’ money should first be allocated to improve our infrastructure as well as modernizing the industry. Because a country with the high unemployment rate and poor infrastructure can scarcely provide the youth and future generations the glory and morality they seek.
By the way of conclusion, on the basis of the points mentioned above, it would seem that it is essential to embark on a mission that beneficial outcomes are greater than risks associated with it. Ignoring the primitive problems in favor of national pride and morality mirage is not only unwise but also wrong in nature.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 455, Rule ID: WHETHER[2]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
...rits of this movement lead to rising of the question as to whether this capital should be used for other b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, regarding, so, therefore, well, while, as to, as well as, by the way, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35185185185 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9933753 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604938271605 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5688227667 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.384615385 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8461538462 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186989613906 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0616893654802 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491739818907 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103412745169 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0706004433349 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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