Some governments spend a lot of public money training up individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Olympics is one of the most famous sporting events in the world and many countries send their best to represent them. Some governments spend significantly huge amount of public money in training athletes to bag medals for the their countries. A school of thought opine that this is wasteful expenditure and instead the money should be spent in the interest of the general public. In my opinion, I completely agree with the latter and shall discuss the same in this essay.
First and foremost people pay a part of their earnings in the form of taxes with the hope that the government will use this money to provide them with better facilities such as subsidized healthcare, housing, etc. Using the this money to train individuals instead helping the people in need is unfair. Although, I agree that winning medals and recognition is a matter of pride for the country, it does not help resolve any existing pressing issues. Therefore, the well being of their citizens should be the focus of the Government. Spending tax payers money to train individuals to be successful in international sporting events seem pointless.
Likewise, practice and dedication and, not money, is required to be successful in sports. Many countries do not have the capacity to provide financial supports to their representatives. However, these countries end up winning the most. For instance, even though Brazil is a poor country, they always end up winning Gold in most of the events they participate. Thus, the aforementioned proves that investing money in training does not guarantee a win.
In conclusion, one should keep in mind that it is the people that make a country and not accolades and fame. Therefore, their happiness should be of paramount importance. Governments should spend their money wisely.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: the; their
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Suggestion: public
... should be spent in the interest of the general public. In my opinion, I completely agree with...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...sidized healthcare, housing, etc. Using the this money to train individuals instead help...
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Message: Did you mean 'proofs' (noun) instead of proves (verb)?
Suggestion: proofs
...y participate. Thus, the aforementioned proves that investing money in training does n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, likewise, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08813559322 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82683004664 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542372881356 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8033815813 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2941176471 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3529411765 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407090454276 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125290704959 0.084324248473 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967186292694 0.0667982634062 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233722215016 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0837017231439 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.