Some parents buy their children large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
Nowadays, double income families have become a norm in societies and families spend less time with their children and they are less concerned with children’s upbringing. Consequently, they try to compensate this with providing more recreational facilities for their young children such as a wide range of toys to play with. There are some benefits and drawbacks for this issue that would be discussed.
A group of people believe that there are more advantages for this trend. Firstly, parents can learn about their children’s interests since some of the toys would be more tempting for young children and they enjoy playing with those specific toys. Secondly, providing a variety of toys help children to develop their talent and innate instincts. Finally, Playing with lego or doing puzzles help children to be more innovative and creative in the future.
On the other hand, there are some significant drawbacks for this issue. Owning a large number of toys will impact children’s character and make them arrogant, selfish and rude people. Furthermore, children would be less interested in playing with their peers and consequently these young individuals would be more isolated. Moreover, they will expect their parents to provide them more things in the future and put pressure on them by pestering or nagging.
In conclusion, although there are some great achievements in playing with wide range of toys, it would have some detrimental effects. Not only parents, but also teachers and schools should think about the consequences of this scheme.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1327.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 248.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35080645161 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96837696647 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80804726144 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 176.041082164 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552419354839 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 390.6 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.7971297191 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.076923077 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0769230769 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7692307692 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347707701052 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119783348931 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692516312826 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208517917316 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600997169351 0.056905535591 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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