Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to do more school work. To what extent do you agree to that?
How do you think children should spend their free time?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Few people are of the opinion that, children are given more than required amount of leisure time. They think that extra time can be utilized to undertake more school work. This approach in today’s competitive world will not contribute much because, of its low applicability. Advent of technology has altered the way learning. Merely spending time on doing school work is just not enough to succeed academically as well as professionally. I will discuss both in detail.
People in favor of investing more time in completing school work think that, children these days are less concerned about studies; rather they are seen spending free time doing irrelevant activities such as; surfing on computer, using cellphones, watching TV, hanging out or sleeping. To be successful academically, it is important that one should complete his/her school work in due time. This practice has been greatly successful until eighties.
First of all, student these days hate to spend extra time on doing school work. Children should be given extra time to socialize with their age bracket group. The more they interact, more they will learn. This is called social learning. They should spend more time in doing extra-curricular activities such as reading novels, watching documentaries, physical exercises, sports etc. In spare time children should be given practical exposure to learning new thing such us letting them fix a broken computer, repairing bicycle, or a broken window. One such example is Pakistan’s Stock Exchange tycoon, Mr. Abdul Karim Dehdi. AKD never acquired any formal qualification but since his childhood he used to work in a stock exchange. Children should be exposed to more complicated learning processes in free time. Bill Gates was dropped out of college but he used his spare time building something which today is known as “Microsoft”.
Schools should introduce process of smart learning rather burdening students with extra workload. Virtual learning environment has almost replaced traditional classroom learning. They should be assessed on level of their extra-curricular activities. They should be given projects to practically work on rather completing assignments with zero learning.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.50728862974 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01471823548 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577259475219 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 16.0721442886 143% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.5294985902 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.1304347826 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9130434783 20.7667163134 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5652173913 7.06120827912 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 3.4128256513 410% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423556089695 0.244688304435 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11982085512 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950595249835 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.269853392682 0.151304729494 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.083039811727 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 50.2224549098 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 11.3001002004 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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