Some people believe that government should take care of old people and provide financial support after they retire. Others say individual should save during their working years to fund their own retirement. What is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include example from your own experience.
Although it is sometime thought that old people after getting retired should be aided financially by government, whilst other people have a notion that money should be saved by the person himself during their working period. In my opinion, I consider that by saving money from the beginning of their career, old people would not have a dependency on others, hence, they can enjoy their post retirement life.
On one hand, it is often believe that government should provide financial assistance to senior citizen because they have contributed much for the betterment of the country when they were young. In other words, old people had paid taxes throughout his working life, therefore, it is now government’s responsibility to look after them when they reach to their old age and are no longer in a condition to earn money. For example, in Singapore, people, when entered to the age of sixties, their government provides them with the monthly stipulated amount. In this way, old people there, have a relaxed life after retirement.
On the other hand, some people think that young people ought to save certain amount of money from their monthly income in order to avoid dependency on others and enjoy their old age. Because, family or government could only fulfil basic needs for a limited time, also, it would be unethical to rely totally on them. For example, my grandparents opened a joint account after they got married, in which they both used to deposit certain amount of money from their monthly income. Now, after retirement they are not living an independent life but also, they are enjoying their life by travelling to places and do whatever they desire.
To conclude, despite of people having different opinion regarding financial responsibility of old people. I personally reckon that young people should aid their own retirement in order to lead an independent life of one’s owe choice.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, regarding, so, therefore, for example, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1599.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06012658228 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64739164137 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553797468354 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 44.5573132793 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.25 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.37379274567 0.244688304435 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149775560861 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0616043731326 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.248898734113 0.151304729494 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436483453919 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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