Some people believe that hobbies need to be difficult to be enjoyable.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, we are leading a busy lifestyle and do not have time for our favorite pastime. It is believed by a certain group of people that in order to lead a joyful life, we need to adapt hobbies which must be demanding and challenging. However, I believe that leisure time can be either difficult or relaxing depending on the individual’s lifestyle.
Those who are performing sedentary jobs should opt for endeavoring activities as a hobby. If a person is spending a whole day in front of a computer screen and after coming home crashes on the sofa to watch his favorite show, this will deteriorate his health in the long run. In order to keep himself fit and healthy, he must opt for a gym, or aerobic exercises so his body muscles maintain the required strength and energy. For instance, according to many research, it is proven that the major cause of life-threatening diseases, such as diabetes, high blood pressure, and heart stroke, is an unhealthy lifestyle and lack of physical activity.
On the other hand, I would not suggest that all people must adopt challenging activities for leisure time. To elaborate, those people who are performing labor jobs where they spent their whole day doing physical work could spend their evening time relaxing with their families at home. In this way, they not only feel joyful, but allow their bodies to recover from the daily stress and strain. Furthermore, some hobbies are pursued based on personal preferences. Art and music, for instance, is admired by a certain group of people, while others prefer to play sports. Thus, individuals should be allowed to choose their leisure-time activity, as long as it is not hazardous for their health.
To conclude, although it is believed by some people that leisure time must be challenging, I suggest that one formula is not fit for all. People should be allowed to choose hobbies based on their personal preferences and compatibility with their professional life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le must adopt challenging activities for leisure time. To elaborate, those people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, thus, while, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94848484848 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76071250169 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.2730611658 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.866666667 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175474606858 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.066149751323 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742575950506 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137101793219 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0998612817079 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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