Some people believe that music should be taught in school while others think that it s better to focus on computer and science Do you agree or disagree

People have different opinion in regarding with which subjects should be included in school curriculum; some opine that it is better to be taught computer and science rather than music. I agree with the above statement.
First of all I believe that computer and science are more significant than learning music in school, the reason is that in the contemporary world, technology is becoming an unavoidable part of day to day to day life so by studying computer it would be helpful for children from the rudimentary matters of technology in early stages. While science also an imperative part of life which they can do simple experience by themselves which would taught in class makes them more interesting to learn more about the subject in future with standout scientist for the world. Moreover this enable those to choose their carrier in advance to get high demanding job in future. Additionally all children can participate in the class to learn.
Secondly music is an art in which everybody could not able to taught as easily. It needs special skills which could be gained by practice and more patience needed. In addition, all of the students may not be interested in learning music because it relays on sound. Meanwhile in a class, a few children would like to choose music as their carrier. Thus, there is no importance to be given to music in the school. Although it provides high status in society however it gives less demand wages comparative to computer and science.
To conclude I strongly believe that knowing knowledge about computer and science are more beneficial than music which should be given more important.

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'day to'.
Suggestion: day to
...logy is becoming an unavoidable part of day to day to day life so by studying computer it wou...
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Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... with standout scientist for the world. Moreover this enable those to choose their carri...
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Line 2, column 654, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...er in advance to get high demanding job in future. Additionally all children can particip...
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Line 2, column 665, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ce to get high demanding job in future. Additionally all children can participate in the cla...
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Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... and more patience needed. In addition, all of the students may not be interested in learn...
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Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...rning music because it relays on sound. Meanwhile in a class, a few children would like t...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94909090909 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62729726318 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556363636364 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.247571034 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.692307692 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285527091814 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944575300742 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901376350864 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19940845801 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812641278246 0.056905535591 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 194, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'day to'.
Suggestion: day to
...logy is becoming an unavoidable part of day to day to day life so by studying computer it wou...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... with standout scientist for the world. Moreover this enable those to choose their carri...
^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 654, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...er in advance to get high demanding job in future. Additionally all children can particip...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 665, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Additionally,
...ce to get high demanding job in future. Additionally all children can participate in the cla...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
... and more patience needed. In addition, all of the students may not be interested in learn...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 265, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Meanwhile,
...rning music because it relays on sound. Meanwhile in a class, a few children would like t...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, while, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1361.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 275.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94909090909 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07223819929 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62729726318 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556363636364 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.247571034 49.4020404114 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.692307692 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1538461538 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285527091814 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944575300742 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0901376350864 0.0667982634062 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19940845801 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812641278246 0.056905535591 143% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.