Some people believe that TV, music and friends develop a child's personality. Other say family still important for the development of a child.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Child rearing is a difficult job, and factors, such as TV, friends and music involved in it are often discussed. However, some people believe that family plays a vital part in the development of a child. In my opinion, technology is increasingly playing its role in formulating a child's personality.
Nowadays, most of parents belong to working class. Both mother and father do job to provide their children with quality of life. Owing to this fact, children spend major part of their leisure time in front of TV, listening to music and in the company of their friends. This, as a result, affect their habits, personality and manners. They observe what they see on TV and also adopt different habits of their friends because they do not get adequate attention of their parents. Sometimes these factors help a child to be mature and adopt ethics of their friends.
On the other hand, no matter whatever factors children encounter, they discuss each and everything with their parents. Parents, resultantly, teach and guide their children about wrong and right. Parents always have a huge role in lives of their children because the atmosphere at home cannot be substituted by friends, TV and music.
In conclusion, I believe that children's interaction with technology has increased massively; even parents direct their children to watch TV or play with their friends so that they may not get interrupted in their routine. Due to these circumstances, children are compelled to pick up trends from these factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, may, so, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1268.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.072 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6965578058 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 371.7 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.3378057523 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5714285714 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8571428571 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161547714771 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0664242686534 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0835743230525 0.0667982634062 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124631092753 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126104958203 0.056905535591 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.0946893788 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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