Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cellphone) or service (eg: medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Price is the main consideration of some people, when it comes products or services. While I agree that it is essential to spend our money wisely, I believe that money should not always be the main element. To begin with, it is indeed essential to control our spending to avoid falling into the debt trap.

We should take into account the level of necessity, when opting for a product or service. Consider this situation. Two products serve the exact same purpose but are sold at different prices. In this case, it is important to take the price into account.Taking handbags as an example, consumers could either go for a quality handbag sold at a reasonable price or a designer’s handbag sold at a highly marked-up price. In my opinion, the latter is not necessary and should be avoided.

However, there are occasions where price tags should be ignored completely. These include health and medical related expenses. The amount of money spent should never be a priority in these circumstances, as any delay in availing the service may lead to a life-threatening situation. In the event that the required amount is more than what the patient could afford, they should still proceed by seeking help from medical insurances or loans. This is because repayment plans could always be set up once they regain their health.

In conclusion, money should not always be the most important consideration. In my opinion, purchasing decisions should be made only after evaluating the need for the product or service. If it is absolutely essential, money cannot be the deciding factor.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 253, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Taking
...mportant to take the price into account.Taking handbags as an example, consumers could...
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Line 7, column 196, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...ed for the product or service. If it is absolutely essential, money cannot be the deciding factor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, still, while, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1321.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00378787879 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83280409496 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587121212121 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7136232511 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5625 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120706288513 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0428759714008 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420647181025 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0713632960332 0.151304729494 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0203384906728 0.056905535591 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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