In today’s world incomes vary depending on the job people are doing. It is argued by some that celebrities earn a vast amount of money. I totally disagree with the statement because of the many aspects of views that I will discuss below.
It is an undeniable fact that most famous people deserve more in comparison with what they are performing. Due to the fact that society is amused by entertainment, they are more likely to be healthy in terms of psychology, indeed, they feel happy and enjoying. For instance, I feel better whenever I listen to music or watch a foot ball match. Another major point of view, because they represent us in international fields such as Eurovision, international competitions, is reputation increase and give us sense of being proud. For example, At the year of 2002, the singer called Sertap Erener had got a first rank award in Eurovision competition, which made me feel everybody on cloud nine. Having considered what they benefited to us, money is can not be criticized the value of them, in contrast, they have to be given more money in order to encourage well-known people to achieve more.
Although the entertainment sector is a high-paid job, there are several jobs as well, such as doctors, teachers, and engineers. Since they contribute to the public, even though not the same way as the entertainments do, by growing new generation that is teacher’s duty or more comfortable living conditions, They should gain too much money. In my country there is a word says ‘Engineers, doctors, and Teachers! The new generation will be your workpiece it is your duty to shape them’.
In conclusion, when we look at the benefits of the jobs mentioned above, keeping them motivated and to let them sustain their job intensively more important than anything else. Thus as much money as possible must be given to delight them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 178, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...vely more important than anything else. Thus as much money as possible must be given...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, look, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1563.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93059936909 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93739132065 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621451104101 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.9019446678 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.642857143 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6428571429 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197587152614 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641292638461 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452072199542 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109176343253 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314573533715 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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