Some people say that money makes life easier and more comfortable. But others say that having a lot of money can bring some problems. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of having a lot of money?
People's opinion differ when the matter of money is brought up. While some prefer living a simple life, others like to make money as much as possible. We have pros and cons on the topic under debate which will the discussed in this essay.
Discussing the benefits of money, first of all, it allows the person to purchase materialistic things according to desire leading to a lavishing lifestyle. For example, luxurious cars like Bently and Rolls Royce require a sufficient bank-balance to afford but guarantee the best comfort possible. This not only provide comfort but also considered as symbol of status in society which makes them respectable in society if current mindset in concerned. Secondly, billionaires, with their adequate resources, can manage top-class facilities. For instance, their children study in expensive school, which are out of reach of middle-class families. Also they follow world-standard healthcare plans keeping them out of reach of pain faced in illness.
Coming toward the drawbacks, firstly, rich people such as businessman or industrialists, have busy schedule making it almost impossible to spare time for family or leisure activity which deteriorates their mental health. Survey performed by US health department have found two out of three businessman facing anxiety. Furthermore, money-man always have to keep up the image as merely a show for society which force them to spend money in ruthless manner. As a result preposterous expenditure are seen on ceremonies and parties which if spent for charity work might have facilitated many impoverished.
In conclusion, although money have its charms like lavish life and facilities, but it also brings stress and constant need of manifestation of opulence.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The proper name in singular (Royce) must be used with a third-person verb: 'requires'.
Suggestion: requires
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
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Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...re seen on ceremonies and parties which if spent for charity work might have facil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 273.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41391941392 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9346352221 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.684981684982 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.0151119413 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.571428571 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6428571429 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209920530466 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0702234864793 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683526980711 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145349758357 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0697778857791 0.056905535591 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.84 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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