Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Music is one of the most important part of human being among people. According to this, some people say music helps to unify different countries that have various kinds of cultures, in spite of age differences people can keep in touch each others. It is because melody has its own power that can makes people happy and give people more happiness in their life. That is why i definitely agree with this statement.

The fundament of music is melody that makes songs audible to listen. Moreover, it can affects people’s mood of that day. Because it has its own value that can change psychological part of humans all over the world. Even thought, if person does not understand word of that song it has still that instrument behind it. For example, loads of studies illustrate that learning another countries language through the listening to that county’s music is accurate way to do this.

Furthermore, music helps to understand different age group of people’s attitude. Because it demonstrates people’s feeling and thoughts. This means they can communicate each other due to the music. Elderly people, for instance, prefer to listen local and folk songs. Because of it people who have younger ages can understand them through the songs and even sing and dance together. These show that music destroys wall that among the different aged people.

In conclusion, music can be the way that unify different culture and age people within the melody of songs. In my opinion, it is obvious that music can makes people happy and enjoyful if people are happy, they gladly to share their cultures and feeling despite ages

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: countries'; country's
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Suggestion: make
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 272.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02205882353 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06108636974 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58663678913 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544117647059 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8929470024 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.3529411765 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.23529411765 7.06120827912 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350956621202 0.244688304435 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113202806125 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862037501514 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233464864508 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829458987997 0.056905535591 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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