Some people say that people should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion.
It is argued by some individuals that parent should persuade their children to take part in group events during their leisure period. Although others do not agree and believe that pupil should have the freedom to their selection of interest during their free time. This essay will discuss both the views followed by personal opinion.
On the one side, organized group activities have a plethora of opportunities for a pupil to develop skills Firstly, the ability of adjustments with other team members can be learnt in participating such events. Secondly, such activities improve social bonding and recognition in the community. Thirdly, such platforms are an opportunity to explore different personal creativity with the guidance of trained staffs. For instance, cultural activity participation by students provides a chance to gain knowledge on the culture and working with others provides exposure to the social world.
On the other side, allowing children to occupy themselves gives them freedom of choice. Independence on a selection of their interest can bring out their full dedication and struggle towards work. In other words, pressurizing children on specific interest may or may not bring fruitful results, therefore teenagers must have the freedom to choose their interest. A recent survey revealed that students who are allowed to have a choice according to their will are more competent and this independence allows them to build more confidence in the work. Therefore I agree with the notion that children must learn according to their willingness.
In conclusion, while, organized activities are mostly professional and provide maximum opportunity to children learn different aspects of social life, I believe that children interest in learning is essential to build confidence and competence, therefore, a teenager must be allowed to occupy themselves on their own during leisure time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for instance, in conclusion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50340136054 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84107890985 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530612244898 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.3351350092 49.4020404114 140% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.461538462 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6153846154 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.53846153846 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348326422791 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124651175864 0.084324248473 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856980241526 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217462285358 0.151304729494 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988222341932 0.056905535591 174% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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