Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In recent years, we have seen the emergence of dangerous sports as the new era of sporting events around the world. Although some people believe that this should be legally prohibited, I might argue that these games are essential and totally depended on country’s choice.
On the one hand, those who believe perilous sports should be banned might argue that they are harmful, and can lead one to death. This is because these are involved with violence and terrifying acts, which can cause negative impacts on society. For example, boxing and wrestling, which are the most widely followed sports in the world, may draw serious impressions on the people especially the children. Conversely, if there are no hazardous sporting events, there will be a much greater chance of riskless games so that health, life and mind of individuals can never be at stake.
On the other hand, my view is that these games are important and free to be chosen as it helps the public to find new career paths. The main reason for that is the dangerous sports, unlike indoor games, can be encountered by the potential people, who are highly skilled and motivated since these are involved with high risk factors. Moreover, it can also be one of the major sources of income to the country. For instance, snorkeling and sky diving, which are the best spine-chilling sports around the globe, can only be challenged by the contestants who have special skill sets. In contrast, if there is no dangerous sport, it will be ruining the morale of the people and can result to unemployment, thus leading to a vulnerable economy.
In conclusion, despite the outcome of the dangerous sports and banning them, it is my firm belief that these sports can be a vital step on the path to nation become economically strong and independently-minded.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 439, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, if, may, moreover, so, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90909090909 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73790444727 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558441558442 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 36.9128101823 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.0 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.91666666667 7.06120827912 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249045214485 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0941379978318 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046760771895 0.0667982634062 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157484397293 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352213409068 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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