Some people think the government should focus on improving the economy of the country. Other people think the government should focus on social services such as health and education programs. Which statement do you agree with? Explain and provide examples to support your opinion.
A significant faction of the society believes that the growing the economy of a nation is every governments' priority task. However, I differ with this viewpoint and am of the opinion that a country is as competent as its people and policies. Just like a chain, which is as strong as its weakest link, I firmly agree that governments should emphasise on, and put in more efforts to phenomenally improve social services as the healthcare and education system.
The predominant drawback of putting the entire impetus on bettering an economy is that it provides minimal or no benefits to the lower strata of the society. Furthermore, it is typically only the politically-linked business tycoons who are benefiting the most in such countries. It has been seen that many a policy decisions are made by a government, to improve the prospects of mostly the elite, or influential strata of its citizens. For example, countries like Russia and Brazil are considered to be run by the governments that are hand-in-glove with the business czars of those countries. On the one hand, while the governments are bringing in policy changes to improve the nation's business prospects. However, on the other hand, their citizens are participating in demonstrations and rallies that clearly depict the apathy shown by the government to them.
In contrast, a government that proactively take steps to raise the quality of healthcare and education system of the nation, is duly rewarded with respect and admiration by its citizens. The countries whose focus is not only to raise the per capita GDP of a country, but to ensure a higher quality of life for its people, turns out to be a far better economy in the long run. A befitting example of the case is Singapore. Albeit, it is a small city-state island, that is just shy of 64 years of existence, their government has ensured that it is considered amongst the top names for better amenities in health and schooling for its citizens. This has led to a society which consists of educated minds taking the companies to even bigger economical heights. In addition, it also boasts of a culture where senior citizens, who worked hard during their younger days to make Singapore what it is today, are looked after with excellent health care facilities.
To conclude, I completely agree with the viewpoint where public services of health and education are prioritised. With the help of the arguments shared above, it can be clearly seen that a growing economy is an aftereffect of having competent citizens whose government takes care of them in times of health related needs.
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, so, while, for example, in addition, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 13.1623246493 190% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 7.30460921844 260% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 41.998997996 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96796338673 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89971713654 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512585812357 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 696.6 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.3982759607 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.705882353 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7058823529 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261305574905 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0734936422822 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0427663010595 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156554760836 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492163258873 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 78.4519038076 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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