Some people think that having a set retirement age (eg. 65 years) for everybody regardless of occupation is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree?
Which type of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
It is believed that fixing a general age to retire, like 65 years, is not a recommendable idea for all jobs notwithstanding their working environments. Instead, some consider that people should be allowed to resign enjoy their life with pension at a providential time of their career, which can be well below the set standards. In my opinion, I agree completely to this since, not the age but the psycho-physical health of a person should be the criteria for deciding the retirement time for a person.
Firstly, the type of work and mental stress taken upon by an employee give him the prerogative to decide the time to end his professional career. For example, a manual labourer who has spent most of his life and health for his job or a war-hero whose physical and mental ability to pursue his military career, should have all the right for an early retirement and pension benefits. This it is clear that certain set of people ought to be considered and allowed to enjoy their retirement life, taking into account their inevitable service for the society and their incompetency to continue their life at work.
Secondly, workers should be given their right to make retirement call, especially for critical service jobs like that of pilots and national security personnel. It is obvious that the ability to champion these kinds of jobs requires high level of havoc management skills and sharp acumen. Being human, a person’s ability to take on these emergency handling services gets deteriorated with age. Hence it is advised that people should be allowed to step down from critical service jobs at early age according to their will.
In conclusion, it is clear that a generalised set retirement age may not work in all the cases, but people’s will to end their service early should be a good solution in jobs with higher physical and mental strain.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91772151899 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76359148765 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525316455696 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.7351859196 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.272727273 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.7272727273 20.7667163134 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63636363636 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201794147582 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826014514258 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0368603264054 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13229021279 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346043383194 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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