Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Generally, schools training will guarantee some percentage of student's success in their future. Some people believe that schools should put more an emphasis on upholding the spirit of competition in pupils while others persist that collaboration will be more impressive. From my point of view, these two feature are complemented of each other and should be fostered in balance.
In one hand, some people believe that contestant is playing a significant role in motivating students to be more initiative. To dig a little deeper, sense of competition makes students do their bests and try to make a more concerted effort to set their selves in a first rank of each contestation. In addition, There is an ongoing research which shows that students could learn better in rivalry. It justifies that superiority complex forces them to pay more attention on what they are learning.
On the other hand, some people contestation is not always efficient while collaboration is definitely valuable for ever. They believe that there are several advantage that schools should tell student about benefits they can reap by collaboration. The first of one, cooperation is one of the necessary feature of a person that have been useful for all steps of life from kindergarten to work place and can not achieve in one day, it take ages so we should reinforce it from early ages. The second of one is cooperation is a win-win property which benefits both side of party and no body would loose though it. The last but not least, psychologists theorized that students are learning far better from each others than teachers. So one of the powerful tools of teaching is falling students in various groups and encourage them to learn lessen by cooperation. By this approach student will find out collaboration leads better results than individuals.
In conclusion, from my perspective,both collaboration and spirits of competition are key virtues that have to be considered and cultivated equally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...h which shows that students could learn better in rivalry. It justifies that superiori...
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Line 5, column 150, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advantage seems to be countable; consider using: 'several advantages'.
Suggestion: several advantages
...e for ever. They believe that there are several advantage that schools should tell student about ...
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Line 5, column 433, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'takes'?
Suggestion: takes
...lace and can not achieve in one day, it take ages so we should reinforce it from ear...
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Line 5, column 579, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'nobody'?
Suggestion: nobody
...y which benefits both side of party and no body would loose though it. The last but not...
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Line 5, column 593, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[4]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...ts both side of party and no body would loose though it. The last but not least, psyc...
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Line 5, column 610, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...arty and no body would loose though it. The last but not least, psychologists theor...
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Line 5, column 835, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to lessen'
Suggestion: to lessen
...ious groups and encourage them to learn lessen by cooperation. By this approach studen...
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Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , both
.... In conclusion, from my perspective,both collaboration and spirits of competitio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13931888545 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94617792123 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557275541796 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5815557599 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182897109121 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621335783728 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533861090909 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117840380311 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528656451487 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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