Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Currently there is a contentious argument that whether the children should be taught to compete or co-operate with each other. In the following contemplation I will discuss that why I believe that co-operation should be encouraged rather than competition among kids.
Team-work and leadership qualities are the two most important benefits of teaching co-operation to adolescents. The kids should be encouraged to get involved equally for solving any group activity so that they learn to build trust amongst themselves. For instance, according to a research the school kids in Japan were found to outperform the kids from Britain in physics Olympiad when the Japanese kids were taught the value of co-operation and team work. Moreover, when the students study by forming small group discussion teams, they also learn to stand alone and express their viewpoint more confidently. Therefore, this helps them in developing leadership qualities.
On the contrary, others believe that a sense of competition is necessary so that the students try to gain more marks than their peers. However, encouraging competition has two major drawbacks that includes jealousy and inferiority complex. Constant comparison with the peers gives rise to jealousy in the students who score less. Moreover, constant low scores might even give rise to low self-esteem and thus result in inferiority complex in children. For example, a research indicated that percentage based examinations resulted in inferiority complex in kids who constantly scored less.
In conclusion, I reiterate that it is important to encourage co-ordination and co-operation among the children as it helps them to build team spirit and leadership qualities. Whereas a sense of competition shall be discouraged as it might lead to negative feelings among kids such as jealousy and inferiority complex.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, moreover, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1542.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41052631579 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9141613036 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543859649123 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 285.0 20.2975951904 1404% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1542.0 106.682146367 1445% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 285.0 20.7667163134 1372% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 121.0 7.06120827912 1714% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214877950142 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.214877950142 0.084324248473 255% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141639444644 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0759411604459 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 146.6 13.0946893788 1120% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -226.26 50.2224549098 -451% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 115.6 11.3001002004 1023% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.58 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.87 8.58950901804 255% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 9.78957915832 603% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 116.0 10.1190380762 1146% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 116.0 10.7795591182 1076% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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