Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers.Others believe that a women's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice
It is sometimes thought by people that Women ought to be provided with the same opportunities as men, so that they can make great strides in work life. However, others think that women should be restricted to managing house work, and looking after kids. In my opinion, I agree that encouraging women to pursue their career provides a great deal of benefits for the whole family.
To begin with, women of the family must be given encouragement to work and climb up the career ladder, owing to the reason that family benefits from the extra income that is earned. This extra income could be used for extracurricular activities, good coaching and other facilities for children, which would lead to higher educational attainment and personality development of their children. In contrast, the families which have low financial means as a result of only male members working, often face problems
Another point to consider is that the presence of working ladies in a family fosters happiness and a sense of achievement among the couples. Take, for instance, a working mother, who enjoys a gratifying life from her accomplishments in the professional life, extends this happiness to her spouse and children as well. Therefore, the Children not only benefit from being brought up by happy parents, but also learn from the hard work of their mother. Moreover, such kids mature quickly as they shoulder responsibilities in their mother’s absence at an early age, and eventually grow up to be responsible adults themselves.
Finally, motivating female members to build a career for themselves is very relevant in today's contemporary society as it will help to break the stereotypes against women which have plagued the society for a long time.
In conclusion, women stepping out of their houses and fulfilling their dreams of
advancing professionally in life, will certainly help to raise self-reliant children and achieving equality in family and in the society.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20125786164 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89974622056 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603773584906 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.4015887445 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.363636364 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9090909091 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291929336507 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114550876649 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679288056764 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137714657515 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872766540664 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eal of benefits for the whole family. To begin with, women of the family must ...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...xtracurricular activities, good coaching and other facilities for children, which...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ale members working, often face problems Another point to consider is that the pr...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...p to be responsible adults themselves. Finally, motivating female members to bu...
^^^
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... plagued the society for a long time. In conclusion, women stepping out of the...
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Line 9, column 81, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ir houses and fulfilling their dreams of advancing professionally in life, will c...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20125786164 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89974622056 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603773584906 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.4015887445 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.363636364 106.682146367 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9090909091 20.7667163134 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9090909091 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291929336507 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114550876649 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679288056764 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137714657515 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872766540664 0.056905535591 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.