Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Are disadvantages of this requirement greater than the benefits for the community and individuals?
According to many reports, over recent past years, voluntary activities are becoming more and more popular, especially among youngsters and it is claimed by many people that youths should be engaged in these non-profit works which play a pivotal role in both personal and society development. Despite all possible benefits, these type of activities have some major concerns which, in my opinion, outnumber the advantages.
To begin with, it is undeniable that helping other people by young volunteers bring a new set of positive impacts. Young people are able to gain numerous real-life experience through these activities. For example, taking care of elderly people, which is one of the most popular work among volunteer, provide them with appropriate opportunities to listen their stories and also get valuable recommendation on either personal life or business. Furthermore, these activities create a sense of cohesion and unity among society. Spending time with needy people such people who suffer from an incurable dieses or deprived students will give the society a sense of unity and support. In long term, both citizens and society benefit from this balanced condition.
On the other hand, engaging in these type of works associated with some problems that are certain to arise. Firstly, young people who are supposed to concentrate on their education or set goals and put their efforts to achieve them, might be distracted from their schedule if they allocate too much time to voluntary works. They may not attend their classes and consequently, their academic performance will be impaired. This problematic situation would lead to second concern which is attributed to the whole society. Lack of skilled experts, probably, would be the first negative result. In long term, society will confront with shortage of either work force or proficient doctors. The pressure of this situation would be much more chronic and complex than lack of volunteers.
In conclusion, based on all aforementioned explanation, it seems all benefits of voluntary activities eclipsed by drawbacks and young people should place emphasis on the main priority of them that is obtaining qualification and higher education. Given this situation, a balanced schedule would be effective measure to address.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 598, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'dies', 'diesis'?
Suggestion: dies; diesis
...uch people who suffer from an incurable dieses or deprived students will give the soci...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, second, so, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 41.998997996 129% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 358.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41620111732 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79769067716 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586592178771 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 506.74238477 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.7918654724 49.4020404114 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.058823529 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0588235294 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.82352941176 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218652459801 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651451324143 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420743689922 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131352245485 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0317398497298 0.056905535591 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.44 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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