Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?

Essay topics:

Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?

Enhancement in computer technology has given an opportunity to enjoy computer games across all age groups. Few children are inclined toward virtual games instead of playing traditional sports. I believe, virtual platform provides immense experience at the comport of couch which is the major reason why liking got shifted. We can change this trend by educating our younger generation and parents must involve themselves in sport activities along with them.

To begin with, since the last decade more and more children are playing computer-based video games as it provides mesmerising and realistic experience. It provides our children with an option to involve in virtual activities that cannot be mimicked in real world.

Because there is no danger teenagers of getting hurt so they can get into it as long as they want. For instance, Flight Simulator is a virtual game that allows a person to learn to fly a plane and it, also, gives in-depth information on most of the instruments used in airplanes.

On the other hand, there is no denying on the fact that our youngsters are obsessed with video games and we must educate them of its negative impact on their body. We must inform our children on the positive aspects of doing physical activities. Additionally, parents must make sure that they should participate into sports activities with their kids in order to set an example for them. Parents, for example, can organise a local sports event in which all the participants are doing some sports like cricket, basketball, football, etc.

To my mind, computer-based games provide very realistic environment because of which our students get addicted to it. Parents must make sure they are educating them of its negative side and simultaneously, parents must indulge in sports activities with their children to help them in shifting their liking towards traditional games.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 253, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...platform provides immense experience at the comport of couch which is the major reason why ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2131147541 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78019254233 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570491803279 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8560756813 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.571428571 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21428571429 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140430591019 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535774556544 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389245898238 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799496344912 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419294838904 0.056905535591 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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