Studies suggest that the rise in the consumption of junk foods is the major cause of obesity. Some people argue that this problem can be tackled to a great extent by increasing the price of food items. Do you agree or disagree?
It is thought by many that the rising cause of obesity is due to eating fast nutriment, but others think that increasing fatness problems can be resolved by changing the actual price of the meal items. In my opinion, I agree with the idea of inflating the cost of such commodities to deal with corpulence and the supporting points will be discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, the affordability of junk cuisine is a major concern which is leading to obesity. Firstly, fast edibles in the market is now available at very cheap charges which is easily accessible by the teenagers and adults. Masses prefer to eat this bread in the markets instead of eating home-made sustenance. The only solution to deal with this is to increase the cost of items twice to the real rate. For instance, if Burger is available at $3, raising its amount of $5 will think people to invest these bucks in the healthy commons instead of buying only burger.
Besides, artificial sweeteners in junk comestible are also a concern. Not only, the utilization of fast foodstuff products is the only reason to increase the fare price, but also there are some diets which have some unnatural sweeteners in soaring amount. This type of nourishment helps in accumulating excess fat in the liver, which in later stages lead to critical illness. Inflating the amount of these products will lead to less consumption. For example, it has been found that children who are eating junk refreshments which has stilted sweeteners are obese at the age of 15.
In conclusion, to tackle with this, high tariff can be an effective way to discourage the consumption of fast eatables. In fact, if countries put this idea into practice, there will be fewer fat people around.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1459.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91245791246 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6715793374 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.5854787253 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.214285714 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2142857143 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189802393714 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599841571556 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0530258122018 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117638305387 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0418897498363 0.056905535591 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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