There should be laws to control the amount and type of violence shown on television programs To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

There should be laws to control the amount and type of violence shown on television programs.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Information on television channels had become root-culture in various society in the world from over the last 50 years. We can learn a lot from television, but it is not a good thing to spend more than an hour a day watching it. I believe that regulation of authority is contributed more benefits to people activities while they watch television’s program.

First and foremost, establishing an amount and type of violence shown on television programs – wrestling match (WWF), violence TV series, and sexual harassment with comedy – is certainly to improve lack of quality TV program being a responsibility of government. It should be realized that age’s level in watching the tube is not only from 18 years above but also there are children that almost whole day spending their time in front of this appliance. Many children of us commit a crime or being victims of bullying is proceeds from watching television, whose have bad’s airwaves programme, continuously. Taking an example from non-government research Indonesia (LSI) show that a half percent of the convicted criminal in several places of Indonesia comes from the young generation, which is some of them argue due to economics factor and the others affect by television showed.

The second, the government through the laws is able to control unnecessary telecast channels and to improve the actual information that will bring a plenty of benefits to the audience. The parents – especially – is no longer to worry about the content of the telly as long as their children watch the tube safely. Moreover, laws enforcing the limitation of display of violence can actually result in the provision of better entertainment on television. The government should take the step in formulating and subsequently implementing such laws in media society as over display of violence may result in the enormous following of bad activities like robbery, infliction of physical harm to enemies among masses which in return may demolish peace of society in future.

Ultimately, as negative effects of violence T.V shows outweigh the advantages. Therefore to save our environment from these drawbacks, there must be some type of laws to monitor the amount and variety of these programs.

Votes
Average: 8 (3 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, may, moreover, second, so, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.3376753507 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20054945055 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98413240157 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 176.041082164 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596153846154 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 506.74238477 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.0029585155 49.4020404114 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.615384615 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1840196088 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0568773052996 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0516766331805 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104934982658 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493456737503 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 78.4519038076 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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