Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, it is true that advertising manipulate people to buy more through this powerful market strategy. Although it gives companies the chance to introduce their new products and services to the customers, it targets people budget to buy unnecessary things.
Advertising is the key part in business market and it gives consumers the chance to know about their choices. In addition, the number of employment in this field is increased dramatically in recent years so it brought lots of job opportunities for individuals. Besides, advertisements are funny, artistic and thought- provoking and the contemporary artists know it as a modern art. Moreover, advertising industry brings a significant increase in the number of sold products across the world, since people get to know about international products and can access them easily. To prove my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in Times magazine, reveals that Nike Company could increase its sales up to 60% by adding international advertisements in their plans.
On the other hand, there are some negative points that are brought to different societies by advertisements. Firstly, children can be easily influenced by the advertisements and as a result they put pressure on their parents by pestering or nagging. Secondly, Advertisers try to convince us that buy things bring happiness in our lives and they persuade us to follow the latest fashions and trends. A research having been done in the Britain, shows that in 2015 over 70% of residents buy things that were not essential for them.
To sums up, Advertisements should be controlled and regulated by the governments in detail and those that targeted children should be banned. This way both group, companies and consumers, will benefit advertisements.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...consumers, will benefit advertisements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, in addition, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1512.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30526315789 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07924674908 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60701754386 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.3762839657 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.307692308 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9230769231 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92307692308 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0969321465254 0.244688304435 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0328201092294 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0247652452644 0.0667982634062 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0510544286343 0.151304729494 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0218926670264 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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