wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness to what extent do you agree
Having money is important, but does it promises utmost joy, is debatable. In the essay below, I will express my views in support of wealth offering happiness.
Those who argue that being happy is not directly related to one's richness, talk about inner satisfaction being more prominent. They usually quote an example of hermits and monks who lives in mountains and spend most of their time praying to their almighty god. For food and other basic things, they are dependent on donations. In case, they do not get enough donations, they would have to come down to normal life to earn to feed themselves. Secondly, these grants are actually extra money someone has earned, because that person wanted to focus on encompassing wealth. As a result, money is still playing a key role here for getting contentment.
In my view, building-a-fortune definitely assures gaiety. A person with deep pockets can spend lavishly on his/her family well being. For example, a person can afford best education available for their children, pay for best healthcare possible and enjoy luxurious holidays around the world gaining happiness. If, that individual does not have that amount of money, he will end up struggling to make ends meet. Hence, wealth is playing a crucial part in people's lives.
Another reason, I see wealth and happiness as each other's synonym is because with this extra money, a person can do a lot of social work for community well-being. For example, a lot of rich people work with NGO's and Governments via their corporate social responsibility initiative, spending their money and their worker's considerable time to teach poor kids. If they would not have been affluent enough, the whole burden would have fallen on government resulting in a shortage of fund, which in turn might have led to a lot of uneducated and unemployed people. Subsequently, we saw that money leads us to widespread happiness.
In conclusion, as we looked at both views, about inner peace more important and wealth vouching for widespread cheerfulness in form of individual and community needs, I can strongly assert that a pile of money definitely leads to more merriment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'promise'?
Suggestion: promise
Having money is important, but does it promises utmost joy, is debatable. In the essay ...
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Message: Did you mean 'promise'? As 'do' is already inflected, the verb cannot also be inflected.
Suggestion: promise
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Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... being happy is not directly related to ones richness, talk about inner satisfaction...
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Line 5, column 161, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'afford the best'.
Suggestion: afford the best
...y well being. For example, a person can afford best education available for their children,...
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to best', 'to well'
Suggestion: to best; to well
...being. For example, a person can afford best education available for their children,...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...son, I see wealth and happiness as each others synonym is because with this extra mone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06162464986 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77337236677 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610644257703 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1230945753 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.388888889 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.55555555556 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0806744119177 0.244688304435 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269063476576 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314652186381 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0498442212103 0.151304729494 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0176078669395 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 78.4519038076 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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