When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spend their free time.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that town planners should have a preference for more parks and gyms to be created than business districts and shopping malls.While I understand the concerns of people who hold this opinion, it seems to me that shopping centers are just as important as parks and gyms in a town.

There are reasons why public facilities are crucial to city inhabitants.First of all, they provide suitable spaces and equipment for people to exercise.For example, people can go jogging in the park and play tennis or basketball at the sports stadium.That helps to keep their bodies fit and it also elevates their mood during the day.Besides, parks and sports facilities are good spots for people to socialize with their neighbors.People can connect with others when they are playing sports or talking casually with passers by in the park.A harmonious relationship between residents helps build a caring and friendly neighborhood.

Although parks and gyms give the town dwellers all kinds of benefits, I would like to point out the importance of shopping malls to the district.Firstly, a shopping center could make shopping more convenient for the local residents.It would enable them to easily purchase things in town and transport them home with less effort and at lower cost.They would not need to spend extra money on transportation or shipping of the goods.Secondly, a shopping mall can provide employment.Locals can find work in retail, maintenance or security of the mall, hence earning an income to support their families.

In conclusion, although parks and sports facilities serve as places for exercise and social activities for city dwellers, I believe that shopping centers are equally important, since they can provide job opportunities and convenience to the town residents.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, hence, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30877192982 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10308378275 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59298245614 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 71.0 20.2975951904 350% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 170.187213092 49.4020404114 344% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 378.25 106.682146367 355% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 71.25 20.7667163134 343% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 28.25 7.06120827912 400% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322528220997 0.244688304435 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.191509207611 0.084324248473 227% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0376047908903 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191509207611 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376047908903 0.056905535591 66% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.2 13.0946893788 299% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 7.87 50.2224549098 16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.8 11.3001002004 264% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.7 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.15 8.58950901804 130% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 9.78957915832 281% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 30.4 10.1190380762 300% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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