Your local hospital has advertised people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital.You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.Write a letter to the hospital.In your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital

Essay topics:

Your local hospital has advertised people to do unpaid work helping at the hospital.You would like to do some work at the hospital in your free time.Write a letter to the hospital.In your letter explain why you would like to do unpaid work at the hospital say what type of unpaid work you would be able to do give details of when you would be available for this work

Dear Mr or Madam,

I am a citizen of London and live on Cyrus Street. I am writing a letter requesting you to advertise your work in the hospital.I read in your ad that you need people who work without pay.

I am a teacher and teach at highschool and do not go to work for three months in the summer. I tend to volunteer at the hospital.I have always dreamed of helping people in need, and now is the opportunity.

I have to tell you that Of course, I have already participated in humanitarian aid.I have gone through a first aid course in the Red Crescent and helped the institution in times of emergency like floods and earthquakes.So I can work in the hospital four days a week from seven in the morning to twelve, and I can do things like change sheets, injections and dressings.

I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible

Yours faithfully,

Daniali

Votes
Average: 6.4 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: I
... to advertise your work in the hospital.I read in your ad that you need people wh...
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Line 5, column 128, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... to advertise your work in the hospital.I read in your ad that you need people wh...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... need people who work without pay. I am a teacher and teach at highschool an...
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Line 9, column 94, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to work for three months in the summer. I tend to volunteer at the hospital.I hav...
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...er. I tend to volunteer at the hospital.I have always dreamed of helping people i...
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Line 9, column 130, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...er. I tend to volunteer at the hospital.I have always dreamed of helping people i...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... need, and now is the opportunity. I have to tell you that Of course, I hav...
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Line 13, column 24, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pportunity. I have to tell you that Of course, I have already participated i...
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Line 13, column 85, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...lready participated in humanitarian aid.I have gone through a first aid course in...
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Line 13, column 85, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lready participated in humanitarian aid.I have gone through a first aid course in...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...f emergency like floods and earthquakes.So I can work in the hospital four days a ...
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Line 17, column 55, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to hearing from you as soon as possible Yours faithfully, Daniali
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, look, so, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.48453608247 13% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 5.05154639175 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 26.3917525773 106% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 740.0 937.175257732 79% => OK
No of words: 161.0 206.0 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59627329193 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.56210296601 3.78020617076 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74010911939 2.54303337028 108% => OK
Unique words: 98.0 127.690721649 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608695652174 0.622605031667 98% => OK
syllable_count: 218.7 290.88556701 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 16.3608247423 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 101.860607368 44.8134815571 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 123.333333333 76.5299724578 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8333333333 16.8248392259 159% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 4.34317383033 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 2.54639175258 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.372320955721 0.216113520407 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148776050296 0.0766984524023 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100556077189 0.0603063233224 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173942839835 0.12726935374 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0861882641765 0.0580467560999 148% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 8.37731958763 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 70.7449484536 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 7.59969072165 97% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 41.2886597938 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 8.54432989691 145% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 64.606741573 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.75 Out of 9
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