We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers.They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes.What things will they be used for in the future?Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should we be more suspicious of their benefits?
In the last two decades cybernetics have experienced a major breakthrough .This led to the utilization of computers in nearly all parts of our daily life, from personal computers to the ones performing complicated surgeries.Surely the uptake of this technology facilitates a lot of difficult tasks but is this excessive dependance ripping the warmth out of our lives?In this essay, I will outline how the availability of computers affects our lives.
Most of the daily tasks an individual experiences are time and effort consuming.These two fundemental qualities could be tremendously saved by the use of computers.The average period required to prepare a decent meal for a middle-class family is around an hour to and hour and a half when using traditional methods.This time could be literally reduced to half if computerized decivesare used instead.Moreover, a busy businessman is enabled to easily close a profitable deal with just a touch on this highly programmed laptop while enjoying his family vacation and not having to exert an extra effort of traveling long distances in order to sign a deal.
On the other hand, new generations are growing remarkably dependent on these modern utilities, which makes them handicapped when it comes to preparing a cup of tea.Inaddition, psychologists suggest that one of the main reasons for sucidal rate increase is the recent electric inventions.This is due to the fact that humans by nature stay emotionally healthy through socializing, but due to the importance of modern technology to maintain a financially satisfying standard of life they gradually isulate themselves.As time passes by each of these individuals gets stuck in a vicious circle of loneliness that eventually leads to suicidal attempts especially among youngsters.
In conclusion, similarly to every other invention computers have their benefits and drawbacks, I personally think it all depends upon how we use the given tools .Moderation is the key here to keep the balance and allow us to live in harmony.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, similarly, so, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81125827815 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.45298254547 2.80592935109 159% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.672185430464 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 75.0 20.2975951904 370% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 178.986556758 49.4020404114 362% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 438.75 106.682146367 411% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 75.5 20.7667163134 364% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.25 7.06120827912 258% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182505890473 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933926051794 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0220252963457 0.0667982634062 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0933926051794 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220252963457 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.7 13.0946893788 334% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -21.57 50.2224549098 -43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 21.2 7.44779559118 285% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 11.3001002004 309% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 17.6 12.4159519038 142% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.74 8.58950901804 148% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 32.5 9.78957915832 332% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.0 10.1190380762 316% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.