You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit?

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You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit?

A lot of people love to travel to new countries or regions. I personally like travelling, and if I have the chance to travel overseas for two weeks, I would like to visit China, which is located in the northern part of Asia region. The following essay will explain in details the reason why I choose China as my main destination point.

To begin with, it is a fact that China is well known for its civilisation, and there are a lot of historical places that I must visit. Firstly, I would definitely visit the Great Wall of China, which is included in the Seven Wonders of the World. It was the longest wall that was ever made by human being, and it was said that astronauts could see the wall with a naked eye from the shuttle space ship. Secondly, I will visit the Tian An Men Square, which is located in the capital city of China or Beijing. The square is a palace where most of the emperor of China had lived until the communist party took over the country in 1960. These ancient buildings contain a lot of historical values; therefore I must visit these places.

Besides the historical places, there are other things that visitors could do in China. There are a lot of beautiful landscapes in the country, such as mountains, hills and valleys which are well known for their purity and originality. And then, China is well known for its unique and exotic animal, Panda. Panda is a part of the bear family, but the animal has a unique colour and it can only be found in China. Furthermore, the country is also famous for its culinary. There are various types of food in China, from the spicy ones until the extreme type such cockroaches or spiders. Therefore, there are many activities that tourists can do, while they visit the country.

In conclusion, if I have the opportunity to visit a new country for fourteen days, I would visit China. There are a lot of things that visitors could do there, from visiting the historical places, seeing the unique animal and enjoying some of the beautiful scenery places.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, while, as for, in conclusion, such as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 364.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42849684138 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502747252747 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 528.3 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.0614840622 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4444444444 106.682146367 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279067619811 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926195751807 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109156038203 0.0667982634062 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199910266177 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744640996251 0.056905535591 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 12.4159519038 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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