6 integrated writing
The lecture apparently refutes the points illustrated in the reading material. According to the professor, online encyclopedia are more benefit than printed encyclopedia. On the contrary, the reading contends an opposite stand that online encyclopedia have some irresisted flaw.
The first point the professor uses the point that the error within printed encyclopedia are more difficult to correct which always last for decades to cast doubt on the reading is that there is perfect reference neither online nor offline, which differs from the statement in the reading that online encyclopedia are nonprofessional that isn’t writing by the experts.
Another evidence the speaker adopts to contradict the passage is the online encyclopedia realize the importance of the reference are and they altering the encyclopedia to nonchangaeble but format, moreover there is an specialize editor who is only work for correct the error reference，which points out that online encyclopedia are reliable too. However, the reading states that the online encyclopedia will be manipulated by anyone who have access.
At last, the point made in the lecture contrasts with what is presented in the reading. As the professor claims, traditional encyclopedia don’t have enough space for printing all knowledge since the format of offline encyclopedia have limited space which need acdemic group to choosing useful knowledge however the online encyclopedia have enough space for quote all accurate reference . Whereas the reading material holds that online topic only receive trivial and hot topics which mislead the impression of encyclopedia .
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| 2019-03-15 | Angelina2016 | 3 | view |
| 2018-07-19 | Shyam Pradhan | 80 | view |
- 47-integrated writing 3
- Nowadays children rely too much on the technology like computers smart phone video games for fun and entertainment Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children s development 71
- TPO47-W1 81
- A D People often buy products not because they really need them but because other people have them 90
- TPO12-Integrated Writing 78
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hangaeble but format, moreover there is an specialize editor who is only work for ...
^^
Line 3, column 216, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...hangaeble but format, moreover there is an specialize editor who is only work for correct the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 390, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h space for quote all accurate reference . Whereas the reading material holds that...
^^
Line 4, column 526, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...h mislead the impression of encyclopedia .
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, whereas, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 43.0788530466 21% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 52.1666666667 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1391.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 245.0 407.700716846 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67755102041 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.48103885553 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00128641959 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 212.727598566 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542857142857 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.49506964 48.9658058833 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 154.555555556 100.406767564 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2222222222 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0173611235471 0.236089414692 7% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00664958199867 0.076458572812 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0188078580933 0.0737576698707 25% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.014961559497 0.150856017488 10% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0259141812093 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.15 58.1214874552 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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