Some people believe that the ability to read and write is the most important one among other human abilities. However, in my opinion, I think the ability is not that important because of technology progression and a negative likelyhood which can occur to well-educated people.
To begin with, the development of technology decreases the gap between the people who cannot read and write and others who can. As artificial Intelligence and virtual reality technologies are widely used by many people, the importance of knowing how to read and write has been decreasing. For example, my grandmother does not know the Korean language due to the Korean war. As her childhood years are ruined by the war, she could not get a chance to be educated. As time goes by, she had to work at a factory and support their families. After he retirement, I tried to teach her how to read and write the Korean language but failed. However, after the dominance of smartphones, there was no reason to teach her because she can deal with read and write process with her smartphone. By intalling a application, she now can listen every letters that she wants to know and write whatever she want by converting her voice into letters. This progression are likely to reduce the importance of the ability to read and write.
On top of that, other abilities become more important to modern people. The value of knowing how to read and write is decreased compared to the past. Since over 95% of Korean are possible to read and write the Korean language without burden, the ability is now considered as fundamental for most people. Unlike the past, knowing how to read and write do not assure the professional success anymore. In contrast, today, other abilities are valued more than a lingustic ability. To be specific, knowing how to cope with the stress is valued higher tha before. According to a study which is conducted by Seoul National University, the more educated people are more likely to suicide than others who had only high school educations. This study shows that even if some people can fluently use more than two or three languages, it useless if he or she cannot control the stress from the work and other people.
To sum up, the ability to read and write is not valued as high as is was in the past because of technology that helps people to read and write and other abilities which affect peoples’ life more than the ability. In this regard, I strongly insist that knowing how to read and write is not that important.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 795, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ocess with her smartphone. By intalling a application, she now can listen every l...
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Line 2, column 889, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...he wants to know and write whatever she want by converting her voice into letters. T...
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Line 2, column 949, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...er voice into letters. This progression are likely to reduce the importance of the ...
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Line 3, column 905, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... stress from the work and other people. To sum up, the ability to read and write...
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Line 4, column 67, Rule ID: VBZ_VBD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...read and write is not valued as high as is was in the past because of technology t...
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Line 4, column 70, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...d and write is not valued as high as is was in the past because of technology that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for example, i think, in contrast, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72665148064 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56428901792 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462414578588 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 672.3 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.555852643 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8095238095 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9047619048 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262449834402 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921806550168 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637147553987 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183791793701 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439367701635 0.0645574589148 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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