In achieving personal happiness, our relationships with family, friends, and colleagues are more important than work and wealth. Do you agree or disagree with this?
Every one in his or her life, tries to achieve happiness and interprets that in terms of his or her own word. I think relationships with family, friends and colleagues are more important than work and wealth. I explore my reasons in the following.
First and formost, having a good relation with family helps us to have their support during our life. family consists of those people who are mentally closed to us and we spent our chilhood with them, so if we have a good relationship with them, it helps us to reduce our mental problems and we can count on them whenever we want.
Secondly, having a good relationship with colleagues helps us to improve and feel much better in our work environment. For example I have an classmate in department, who I can refer to when I encounter with a problem in my lessons and he helps me as much as he can. sometimes without his help, I get stuck in a problem many hours and I was completely disoriented. so having a good relationship with him, helps me to improve in my lessons and have a good impression on my teachers during my education. also it will probably result in accepting in a better university for my higher education award different scholarships.Thus we can say somehow having a good relation with other colleagues could help us to have an impriovement in our work and wealth condition.
Thirdly, friends and their presence in our life helps us to face with difficulties much easier and feel more confidance For instance, when I had a terrible break up with my boy friend, my friend helped me to recover and find myself and her helps, paved the way for me to back to the normal life.
All in all, because of the reasons which I mentioned above and many other reasons that I didn't bring here, I think relation with people who are playing a role in our daily life, is so important and also affects other aspects of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1545.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 340.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54411764706 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7034819916 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488235294118 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 478.8 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.7002036545 48.9658058833 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.75 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3333333333 20.6045352989 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262875461505 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120568649413 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125905896264 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16207746076 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729588331488 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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