Nowadays, there are more and more pollutions around us. So the government are trying to reduce all kinds of polutions and encourage conservation. However, the most effective way for government to encourage conservation may not be increasing the price of gasoline and electricity.
It is true that increasing the price of gasoline and electricity would avoid people purchasing more gasoline and electricity. Then people may ride bikes or walk to commute instead of driving cars or taking buses, which would release considerable pollutants endangering our air. And people may not use too much electricity because of the costly expenditure. However, it is not the most effective way to encourage conservation. What if there are rich men who do not care about the expenses of the gasoline and electricity? Is this method really helpful? Probabily not. They may not be worried about the significant costs of the gasoline and electricity and they still driving cars everyday and utilize a large amount of electricity. Meanwhile, this tactic is harmful for some industries and official buildings. Because after increasing the price of the gasoline and electricity, these industries and buildings still need to use a myriad of electricity and gasoline to produce more necessities for people such as gasoline refinement industries and heating departments. Hence, the increment of the price of gasoline and electricity is another gigantic expenses for them, which is unfair. Consequently, this method would not be the most effective way to encourage conservation.
Moreover, there are still many means to encourage conservation which would be more viable. It is widely acknowledged that the most important problem currently is globle warming and releasing carbon dioxide is the most crucial reason. So planting numerous of trees to absorb considerable carbon dioxide is another method to protect our environment. Plus, noise pollution is also a large problem. There are many types of noise around us in our lives. When we are studying, noise from another constructing building is transferred into your room. When you are sleeping, your neighbors are singing songs continuously. Therefore, using more resistant-noise walls to construct buildings is also another way to reduce pollutions in our lives. Furthermore, light pollution is becoming more severe in cities. Significant lights are shining from the downtown of the city and engender people cannot go to sleep and provide a lot of heat to hazard the environment. Thus, reduce the intensity of lights is another strategy to encourage conservation.
In sum, there are other methods which could also encourage conservation and increasing the price of gasoline and electricity is not the most effective way because it would provide more problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...electricity and they still driving cars everyday and utilize a large amount of electrici...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ght pollution is becoming more severe in cities. Significant lights are shining f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2360.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 436.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4128440367 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04374303874 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449541284404 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.0 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.3439409702 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7692307692 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7692307692 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23076923077 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415873269435 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110232274287 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174877098634 0.0737576698707 237% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331263289863 0.150856017488 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167947690933 0.0645574589148 260% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 58.1214874552 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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