TPO-12 - Integrated Writing Task
Jane Austen (1775-1817) is one of the most famous of all English novelists, and today her novels are more popular than ever, with several recently adapted as Hollywood movies. But we do not have many records of what she looked like. For a long time, the only accepted image of Austen was an amateur sketch of an adult Austen made by her sister Cassandra. However recently a professionally painted, full-length portrait of a teenage girl owned by a member of the Austen family has come up for sale. Although the professional painting is not titled Jane Austen, there are good reasons to believe she is the subject.
First, in 1882, several decades after Austen's death, Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. Austen's family clearly recognized it as a portrait of the author. So, for over a century now, the Austen family itself has endorsed the claim that the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
Second, the face in the portrait clearly resembles the one in Cassandra's sketch, which we know depicts Austen. Though somewhat amateurish, the sketch communicates definite details about Austen's face. Even though the Cassandra sketch is of an adult Jane Austen, the features are still similar to those of the teenage girl in the painting. The eyebrows, nose, mouth, and overall shape of the face are very much like those in the full-length portrait.
Third, although the painting is unsigned and undated, there is evidence that it was painted when Austen was a teenager. The style links it to Ozias Humphrey, a society portrait painter who was the kind of professional the wealthy Austen family would hire. Humphrey was active in the late 1780s and early 1790s, exactly the period when Jane Austen was the age of the girl in the painting.
The lecturer challenges the topic proposed in the reading that there are good reasons to believe jane Austen is the subject, because he thinks that the argument only prove the subject is a teenager and those reasons are questionable.
First, the article indicates that Austen's family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. However, the professor points out that letters were published when jane Austen had been dead 70 years, and her family members never actually seen her by themselves. Hence, her family members cannot make sure whether the subject is jane Austen or not.
Second, the essay supposes that the face in the portrait resembles the sketch that depicts Austen. But the lecturer supports that her family consists of many female cousins resembling jane Austen who were teenagers in relevant period. some people considered the true subject is one of her relatives.
Third, the passage suggests that there is evidence that the painting was painted when Austen was a teenager. Nevertheless, the professor argues that some details were related to later date. Records show that the black canvas was sold when Jane Austen was 27 years old, which is clearly older than a teenager. Thus, the painting could not be painted when Austen is a teenager.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 236, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Some
... who were teenagers in relevant period. some people considered the true subject is o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, nevertheless, second, so, third, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 12.0772626932 141% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 22.412803532 89% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 30.3222958057 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1089.0 1373.03311258 79% => OK
No of words: 215.0 270.72406181 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06511627907 5.08290768461 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.82921379641 4.04702891845 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45032861672 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 145.348785872 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590697674419 0.540411800872 109% => OK
syllable_count: 333.0 419.366225166 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.23620309051 85% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 13.0662251656 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1845331151 49.2860985944 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0 110.228320801 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5454545455 21.698381199 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 7.06452816374 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 4.19205298013 24% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.532296718333 0.272083759551 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.205412821916 0.0996497079465 206% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100734468458 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294867158172 0.162205337803 182% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779357722226 0.0443174109184 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.3589403974 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.2367328918 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.42419426049 103% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 63.6247240618 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.