A/D: Parents should give school-age children money as reward for getting a high mark in their schools.
Throughout the history, one of the main stimulus of human’s succeed has been the money. Generally, monetary issues are accounted as the powerful motivation that can drew people to particular conducts. A plethora of people is in the conviction that giving money to children is a good tool to encourage them continue or repeat their acceptable manner. Contrary to this popular belief, there are those who argue that highlighting the role of money in the school-age children brings variety of disadvantages to their life. I am of the opinion that, money is not a sensible means as a reward, and the following explanation will further elaborate on this perspective.
First and foremost, the complexity of today’s world put on different kind of pressure and stress to the society, and money is the primary element of modern life which becomes an integral part of it. Undoubtedly, children as one the most vulnerable segments has been affected by this simple and complicated factor. Children encounter various kind of financial issues everywhere during a day; from their home to the society and school. Therefore, they have already influenced dramatically and it would not be sensible if their parents distribute their life with giving them money as a reward. In fact, monetary issue should not be a matter of concerns for children in that age.
Another crucial fact that should be taken into consideration is that school-age children, notably in early ages, cannot judge what is appropriate for their life, so they want to have whatever they like. In this circumstance, giving money to them may have adverse consequences in their life; however, it may encourage them to continue their good deeds. Apparently, the importance of the subject is applying the correct and useful approach that children can express their desires and their parents fulfill their suitable requirements while not giving them money as a wise control point. Indeed, this element is highly depended on the age-category of the kids, and in higher ages, for instance in high school, familiarizing them with these issues helps the teenagers that not only appreciate the money that they have but also do not spend too much money for their demands.
On the basis of the point mentioned above, I am convinced that children should not urge to commit particular actions due to taking money as a reward. Obviously, pushing the children to financial issues have bad impact on their life, in addition to the fact that they may misuse their given money for wrong intentions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'committing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'urge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: committing
...convinced that children should not urge to commit particular actions due to taking money ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y may misuse their given money for wrong intentions.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'apparently', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'therefore', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in fact', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228632478632 0.229887763892 99% => OK
Verbs: 0.143162393162 0.158761421928 90% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0854700854701 0.0866891130778 99% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0576923076923 0.046263068375 125% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0641025641026 0.0685040099705 94% => OK
Prepositions: 0.130341880342 0.118717715034 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0405982905983 0.0351676179071 115% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75911902672 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299145299145 0.0309702414327 97% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0940170940171 0.0887237588012 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235042735043 0.0209618222197 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0128205128205 0.0139019557991 92% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2544.0 2387.08602151 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08612440191 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.363636363636 0.338922669872 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.287081339713 0.251872472559 114% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.203349282297 0.174417080927 117% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.122009569378 0.112833075102 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75911902672 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 59.7197669829 59.2087087015 101% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6684587814 77% => OK
Sentence length: 26.125 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9297540123 48.84282405 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.0 120.699889404 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 20.5533526081 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.875 0.644075263715 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 54.8331339713 45.7405998639 120% => OK
Elegance: 1.50806451613 1.45489161554 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248031851084 0.300154397459 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.129469569399 0.103427244359 125% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0604074957361 0.0752933317313 80% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.558139757607 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131836970463 0.151897553556 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11766945859 0.114077575197 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587286686929 0.0781384742642 75% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.483770871601 0.336927656856 144% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0136137442332 0.067059652881 20% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193694433737 0.210909579961 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0443177891935 0.0618886996521 72% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8870967742 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.91756272401 20% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 9.0 8.42114695341 107% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 2.4623655914 203% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 13.6433691756 110% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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