A/D: “Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.”

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A/D: “Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office.”

It goes without saying that in such a sophisticated world where the realms of knowledge are expanding dramatically, the modern technology endowing communication facilities has provided another possibility for people to work more easily. Some people are inclined toward the attitude that it is of great benefit to work at home using these facilities whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, working in office is much more suitable for individuals. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that working at home is likely to cause some physical problems for the workers. Since working through the internet or using telephone is somehow categorized in sedentary activities and workers spend long periods of time sitting on a chair without any significant movement, their body will soon become tired. If this happens to them regularly, it would harm their health. A very tangible example of these kind of problems is spinal distortion caused by lack of significant movements of one's backbone.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that it is established beyond doubt that staying home for most of the time will cause some mental problems as well. Since people working at home do not experience social interactions much in comparison with the ones working in their office, it would influence their social behavior negatively. They might be depressed and become more introverted as they spend most of their time in their house. Although they can establish some relations through the internet using some social networks such as Facebook, it would not have a dominant effect generally.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that working in an office is the best way of working. It is highly recommended that companies should institute a system that checks the times of ingress and egress of the staff to make sure that they are present in their office during work hours. But that was the story in a nutshell. In fact, there are a myriad of other reasons, challenging the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, but, first, if, so, well, whereas, in fact, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07258064516 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76500285339 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551075268817 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4850416216 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.9375 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3125 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195685544324 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601076374795 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0654841012796 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120503725386 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327351744314 0.0645574589148 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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