Agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific details and reasons to support your response.
Our lives are certainly affected by the interference of others. personally, I strongly agree with the idea that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. I feel this way for certain reasons which will be thoroughly discussed in my following paragraphs.
First and foremost, what has been put under consideration is working efficacy. it cannot be denied that having freedom from interference gives famous people more time to practice in their own fields. As a result, they are likely to have a larger extent of concentration on their process. accordingly, there is a large probability that they will efficiently use this time to yield high-quality performance to serve their audiences. More importantly, perceiving the true freedom, famous people are inclined to comfortably enjoy their leisure. Because of this, they stand a golden chance to completely revive from exhausting state. having their minds thoroughly relaxed, celebrities are bound to generate a larger number of creative ideas. accordingly, this creates a chance for their audience to see an astonishing fulfillment. Indeed, private space enhances the working productivity of each person, including famous ones.
On the other hand, some people might say that only by being followed can famous characters maintain their righteousness. Therefore, they seize the capacity of nourishing their reputation. However, it is only applicable to a minority. In fact, each person is mindful enough to have their own criteria of behavior. For this reason, most gestures are put under a careful consideration before being expressed. Furthermore, deeply digging for personal information should be considered as a type of harassment. being bothered nearly all the time, celebrities have a tendency to being severely stressed. Consequently, at certain level, their minds are bound to be fainted by sorrow and madness, leading to larger number of wrong actions. Beyond any doubt, the idea that having personal information known by audience enhances their popularity is often possible to end in collapse.
In a nutshell, all the evidences I mentioned above conclusively support my perspective that followers should not profoundly interfere with popular people’s lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, furthermore, however, so, therefore, i feel, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1927.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 346.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56936416185 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31289638616 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05366072067 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601156069364 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 602.1 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.550991067 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.5909090909 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7272727273 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.36363636364 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235048867259 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665823757545 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1119909648 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167003552732 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122097164912 0.0645574589148 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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