Our lives are certainly affected by the interference of others. Personally, I strongly agree with the idea that famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. I feel this way for two reasons which will be thoroughly discussed in my following paragraph.
First and foremost, what has been put under consideration is working efficacy. It cannot be denied that having freedom from interference gives famous people more time to practice in their own fields. As a result, they are likely to have a larger extent of concentration on their process. Accordingly, there is a large probability that they will efficiently use this time to yield high-quality performance to serve their audiences. More importantly, perceiving the true freedom, famous people are inclined to comfortably enjoy their leisure. Because of this, they stand a golden chance to completely revive from exhausting state. Having their minds thoroughly relaxed, idols are bound to generate a larger number of creative ideas. Accordingly, it created a chance for their audience to see an unconventional fulfillment. For instance, my friend, Vu Hoang Kien, made an incredible leap at his past situation after receiving less harassment from the members of his FanClub. In fact, he has been one of 100 best coders in the world. Indeed, private space enhances the working productivity of each person, including famous ones.
On the other hand, some people might say that being followed is the unique way to guarantee that famous characters will maintain their righteousness. Therefore, they seize the capacity of nourishing their reputation. However, it is only applicable to a minority. In fact, each person is mindful enough to have their own criteria of behavior. For this reason, most gestures are put under a careful consideration before being expressed. Furthermore, deeply digging for personal information should be considered as type of harassment. Being bothered nearly all the time, idols have a tendency to being severely stressed. Consequently, at certain level, their minds are bound to be fainted by the sorrow and madness. It leads to larger number of wrong actions which contradict with the original target. Beyond any doubt, the idea that having personal information known by audiences enhances their popularity is often possible to end in collapse.
In a nutshell, all the evidences I mentioned above conclusively support my perspective that journalists should spend more time for famous people to enjoy their personal lives.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, consequently, first, furthermore, however, so, therefore, for instance, i feel, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3475 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95131220815 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5825 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 666.9 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5293894644 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.56 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0796693774019 0.236089414692 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0221326929219 0.076458572812 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314836764638 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533109756245 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402216258674 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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