Agree or disagree. people spend two much time on enjoyable task compared to what they should do
What we do impacts our life in many different ways, and it is paramount that we choose our path, and spend our life's time-line in a more optimal way. I am of the conviction that it is extremely advantageous to spend it in a way which benefits our happiness, and I believe that many people would share a similar opinion about their life-choices. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will interpret in the following essay.
First of all, people who purchase their enjoyment are more Succesful, in general. For one thing, when you love what you do, you will operate it in the best way possible. For another thing, task-enjoyment helps one's mental state which benefits his or her outcome. Consequently, optimal performance and good mood profit success. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. I remember when I was at college, several years ago. I had a colleague who was not good at school subjects and got bad scores most of the time because he did not care less about academics. In fact, he loved sports and joined the tennis club during his first semester. It did not take a long time for him to be promoted as the captain of the team. He failed to purchase an academic diploma, however, he became an athlete. As a result of his passion for task-enjoyment, he has become a wealthy, famous, and well-reputed person, who everyone admired; He becomes a really successful person.
For this reason, I believe that many successful people are the ones who purchased their dreams, and owe their success to that fact; hence, they would influence other people to do the same, as role-models.
Ostensibly, doing the norm would assure you an excellent life, but this fact is due to change. Recently tv-programs, psychologist, printed books, etc persuade us to live freely; they motivate us to enjoy our life more. Granted, a person who does the norm will hardly encounter trouble, but one who wants to enjoy the life needs to take the risk of doing what he wants; what motivates a person matters the most. For instance, I took a psychology course during my previous semester. I have been happy with my normal life and dedicated everyday schedule, before taking the class, but I always suffered from a lack of motivation. That class taught me how to be motivated by enjoying my tasks. I started to enjoy my weekends: watching movies, going to theatres, and parties with my friends are now added to my schedule. Consequently, I am much concentrated and motivated in my weekday task. Enjoying my weekends paves the way for both my mental health and my actual task performance. I believe that more people are going to be informed about the benefits of task-enjoyment true commercials.
In conclusion, I am of the option that, people spend a lot of time on enjoyable tasks. This is because most of the influencers did the same and because recently many resources inform people about its benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 32, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
What we do impacts our life in many different ways, and it is paramount that we choos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, really, so, well, another thing, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, in general, as a result, first of all, for another thing, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2413.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 506.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76877470356 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7428307748 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76374831879 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53162055336 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 751.5 618.680645161 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 23.0 9.59856630824 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0841840306 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.3703703704 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7407407407 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25925925926 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212583884963 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0548895917848 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0493974641215 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121077465426 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0211918075445 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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