Living in a highly speed-up society, people nowadays have a totally different lifestyle than people in the past. Someone claims that people are more happy and satisfied with their lives now. From my perspective, although we have diverse entertainments now, abundant amusements make them get overwhelmed in them and find it difficult to be satisfied, and the high pace of work leaves them with no spare time and space to pursue something they can indeed get satisfaction from.
Admittedly, we live in a completely different world now: online games, TV programs, movies, electronic music. These entertainments are produced for amusing people. However, the most important thing is not these entertainments are not interesting, on the contrary, most of them can give people a sense of relaxation. The most important thing is that the word "glut". Many people now are easy to get overwhelming in these amusements, and cannot get the expected amusement. For example, a lot of university students. including my roommates Jack, they watch TV programs all day long and stay up late at night. There is a glut of TV programs, and Jack does not know which one is his really likes. He just randomly switch another after he finished a series of episodes. In addition, he was tired in the next morning courses and often got criticized by teachers because of his laziness.
Moreover, even though we know what we really like, the high paced work may not allow us to get enough satisfaction. People now live a more stressful life than before. It is common that IT workers begin to work at eight am and finish it at nine pm, and this schedule is constant in a week, whatever workday or weekends. If an IT man likes to ride to the mountains, how can he find a whole day to entertain himself. What he can do is to read some books about previous travel notes to get somewhat relaxation during the commuting time.
To sum up, people now are less happy and satisfied not only because we are difficult to find what we really like, but also the high paced life makes it tough to get time to entertain ourselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('highly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('speed-up') instead of another adjective.
Living in a highly speed-up society, people nowadays have a totally...
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Suggestion: Including
... example, a lot of university students. including my roommates Jack, they watch TV progra...
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'an' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: an; IT
... week, whatever workday or weekends. If an IT man likes to ride to the mountains, how...
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Message: Did you mean 'mans'?
Suggestion: mans
... whatever workday or weekends. If an IT man likes to ride to the mountains, how can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, for example, in addition, on the contrary, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 364.0 407.700716846 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78296703297 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78054959387 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585164835165 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5330751685 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6315789474 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1578947368 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42105263158 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20846327258 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0662808284879 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0972260654779 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13747343824 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653350044392 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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