The author claims that scandals are useful since they focus people’s attention on problems that no speaker or reformer ever could. From my point of view, although scandals may be embellished with some untrue details by media, the cores of them are reliable. Furthermore, it can trigger people’s motivation to discuss and explore the truth, which is very helpful not only for them to know what exactly happens in the world, but also for the whole society to introspect and find ways to improve.
Admittedly, media, the eye of the public towards the world, always publish exaggerated scandals to gain more attention. Sometimes they even add untrue details to make the vivid story. Thus, scandals, what we read what we learn from newspapers or TV, cannot be one hundred percent exact, and then it would mislead our attention. For instance, Zhao Zhengyong, a governor of Shannxi Province, was accused of corruption of 100 million dollars last year. Many media at that time tried their best to weave the vivid story about the luxurious life that a corrupt officer should live aimed to catch more focus from the public. However, they pay little attention to the much valuable one that the weakness of our political system in which Zhao could make such a large number of corruption and the far-reaching bad consequences to the local economy and the bureaucracy.
Nonetheless, every coin has two sides. although scandal can somewhat mislead people’s attention, it’s still has a true core, and it indeed stimulates and motivates people to probe into more truth. Unlike listening to speech which is passive-instilling processes, reading or hearing a scandal, can irritate people’s curiosity and lead them to discuss and even do some research. Finally, the whole truth will be exposed to the public under such efforts. Think about a professor always talk about that we need to take measures about food security, and a breaking scandal that many famous chain restaurants use swill-cooked dirty oil in their kitchen, obviously the latter would shock people better and lead them to discuss the food security. Then the public pressure may push the government to implement more strict regulations on restaurant and food process companies. Besides, nowadays another hot topic, academia miscount, which in fact is a long-term issue, but it successfully got people’s attention only 5 years ago. This is because a famous scientist, Ceon Ming, a member of the Chinese Academy of Science, was proved to fabricate data in 57 papers, and 14 of them are published in top journals, such as Science, Cell, etc.
The opponent of this statement may contend that the consequences of scandal are not always favorable, sometimes can make the society even disorder. This worst possible consequence may happen since some scandals are unimaginable and unacceptable to people. However, as soon as the government actively response and make some firm commitments to deal with the fact reflected by the scandal, the crowd’s rage would gradually decrease. This also gives the government a chance to show its crisis management. If it can perfectly address this problem, the rage may transform into people’s trust in their government. Besides, as the famous Chinese educationist, Confucius said, one fear to face problems can never be able to solve them. We need to let scandal be in the spotlight, and then we can think up ways to address it based on the combination of government and society.
To sum up, even though the exaggerated scandal may mislead people to some extent and lead to social chaos, its true core can perform a useful role in people’s attention to problems. Consequently, the extended discussion and government’s activity will reveal the truth and help us to better address this problem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 752, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...al system in which Zhao could make such a large number of corruption and the far-reaching bad con...
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Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Although
... Nonetheless, every coin has two sides. although scandal can somewhat mislead people’s a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, then, thus, for instance, in fact, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3180.0 2235.4752809 142% => OK
No of words: 620.0 442.535393258 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12903225806 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98996985923 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76842799227 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 329.0 215.323595506 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53064516129 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 955.8 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6508558019 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.307692308 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8461538462 23.4991977007 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.80769230769 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 5.13820224719 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215803353974 0.243740707755 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564892641792 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114588370886 0.0758088955206 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128085952822 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0872545394026 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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