Businesses should hire employees for their entire lives. Do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Over a few decades, the way of working has gradually changed. Although it depends on countries, many companies have started to stop the custom of working until employees retire. I believe that businesses should not hire employees until they retire. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, many people seek the effectivity and security benefits because running a company requires a tremendous amount of money. Some companies positively fire their employees to prioritize effectivity and employ new people who have novel skills. To avoid being fired by the company, employees try hard and compete with their co-workers. It could have positive effects on the company.
Second, people should have experience in different companies. Many people in the United States, for example, quit their jobs and look for new ones in order to improve their working skills.Some people think that fire is a negative term, and they do not want to be fired from the company. In terms of experience, however, young people should quit their jobs every 5 or 6 years actively. When people find a good company where they can put their specialized skills, which they have gained experience in many companies, they will work for many years while having fun. On the other hand, if people have to work in the same place for thirty or forty years, they feel bored, and some people have problems with their relationships with employees or bosses. As a result, they have to work in a stressful environment for a long time.
On a final note, businesses should stop the old-fashioned working style of hiring employees until they retire from the company, because companies should seek their effectivity and look for new people who have good skills. People ought to have experience in many environments and kinds of work. Therefore, I absolutely disagree that businesses should hire employees for their hall lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i feel, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1619.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04361370717 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61191127932 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510903426791 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.2977103446 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.933333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171445898858 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800287004679 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853748934243 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129203007581 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672004507896 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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